“DAMN COLD DAY!”
“Damn cold day today!”
He entered on the attack.
“Indeed it is, Sir,
A very fine one, at that!”
Uninvited, unwelcome,
And lacking in tact,
“Your house looks like crap,”
He scowled and growled back.
“Indeed it is, Sir,
A very fine one at that!”
I faced him, smiling,
Never giving him my back.
He sneered at me boldly
And tried another tack,
Cursing like a sailor,
“That’s a damn ugly cat!”
“Indeed it is, Sir,
A very fine one at that!”
Unable to argue,
I watched his face turn black.
Disgusted and confused, he spit,
“I’ll be right back!”
“You’re welcome anytime, Sir,
Please do come back!”
I sat there and waited, but
He never came back.
•
“Damn Cold Day!” © 1/26/2014 Aisha Abdelhamid
Click Here for next week submission
Written and submitted for the Speakeasy Fiction Slam And Poetry Jam, Post #146. This week’s prompt is to be used as the last sentence: “I sat there and waited, but he never came back.” The video prompt to be referenced is “C is for Contrafibularity,“ and I referenced it by using the first two lines of the clip.
;^)
Aisha's Oasis 
Absolutely LOVE this one! Only way to beat a contrary curmudgeon at his/her game is to agree with everything they say, as sweetly as possible. Well done, Aisha! 😀 xo
LikeLike
Thank you sooo much – I really appreciate the encouragement! xoxoxo ;^)
LikeLike
Haha that was a fun read ! I love how you have tried to rhyme every line and still the lines tell the whole funny story 😉 Your cat is cute too you know 😛 Lovely attempt with the prompts. Love you Ayesha 🙂 xx
LikeLike
Thank you sweetheart! – lol no, that’s really an ugly cat! xoxoxo ;^)
LikeLike
Brilliant!
LikeLike
Thank you Zainab! – I appreciate the encouragement, and can’t wait to go read everybody elses now that I’m finally back online with dsl! xoxoxo ;^)
LikeLike
Best of luck for the voting 😉
LikeLike
Same to you, dearheart, and to all of our other partners in this very fun game! xoxoxo ;^)
LikeLike
The idea of it, the way you portrayed: very brilliant.
LikeLike
Lol I’m blushing! You are too kind, sweetheart! Xoxoxo and all my thanks, too! ;^)
LikeLike
Super fun! Great rhythm. I like how you used the first two lines of the video as a start. Also! Totally fabulous beer-drinking cat.
LikeLike
Thanks very much! Me too, I died laughing when I found that great cat photo! Lol ;^)
LikeLike
This made me chuckle – love the response to every complaint. It seems some people might be allergic to kindness 🙂
LikeLike
Thank you! I’m very happy you enjoyed it! Yes, some people seem to spend their days like this, dont they… too bad for them! ;^)
LikeLike
I love it! Very well written.
LikeLike
Thank you very much – I really appreciate the encouragement! ;^)
LikeLike
Love it!
LikeLike
Thank you! ;^)
LikeLike
Thank you so much everybody for such wonderful encouragement! I’m going crazy here doing the on an iPhone without a mobile app because the telephone station in our area went dead in a rainstorm late mnday night! I’m trying to get my comments approved, and then I’ll try to reply individually – thanks for your patience and please pray for mine!
LikeLike
Nicely done! Love that you used a line from the clip as your opening. Thanks so much for linking up with us at the Speakeasy this week! 🙂
LikeLike
Thanks for your encouragement – I feel this is a wonderful community and very enjoyable weekend event! Insha’Allah, I’ll try it again next weekend! ;^)
LikeLike
An interesting take on the prompts! I love reading poems at the Speakeasy. Thanks for sharing.
LikeLike
Thanks for visiting me and reading! ;^)
LikeLike
This is very fun and clever. I laughed at the “Your house looks like crap” line 😀
LikeLike
Thanks very much! I needed another insult that rhymed! ;^)
LikeLike
Oh, that’s just brilliant. I love your tone; the rhythm; the use of the prompts. It was just begging to be read aloud, in spite of the sleeping baby at my side. Well done!
LikeLike
Thank you very much! Lol I read it aloud to my husband and it cracked him up too! ;^)
LikeLike
Great job with the prompts, this was a really fun piece to read.
LikeLike
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
LikeLike